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Avengers: Endgame Review

af , lørdag 11. maj, 2019
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Avengers: Endgame Review

If you haven't seen the film and want to I advise looking away


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  • Katie Pharoah
    This is cool. I love the description, particularly the colour imagery of yellow in the second chapter. I get a Hunger Games vibe but more on a mythological sense and the beasts described are depicted wonderfully.
    CC: There are some tense changes from past to present throughout and several missed words in some chapters. For example in Chapter Four, it should be "everyone knew it. There are no questions if his parents loved him." In Chapter Seven, it should be "I want to have mind changed."
    But these are small issues. Overall, I loved the tension ramp up and the ending left a hopeful, future story. Well done :)
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    I'm loving these competition centred blogs. And this one is written beautifully, I've just finished reading the book Circe by Madeline Miller, which focuses on Greek myths; very interesting and an awesome read.
    DeeundDrang
    3 hours ago
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    The book that my mind kept going to was The Song Of Achilles by the same author. I was... devastated by that book. I loved it! But I'll give Circe a go, too. Myths are awesome! Or dreadful, depending on the myth. But it's amazing what the human mind can come up with to explain the inexplicable.
    I'm glad you like them! I hope they inspire you!
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    These are awesome, I love "Music" and "Mine" especially, hope you keep going :)
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    1 days ago
    Thank you so much! I plan to do so, so don't worry!
  • Katie Pharoah
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    This is great, I love the description and the lore is just picking up with the fourth chapter. I have a few CC points; in the very first chapter I would suggest to just say she screamed instead of having the "ahhh" to make the pace flow better, and in the fourth chapter I think 'sniffles' should just be 'sniffle'. Can't wait to read more though :)
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  • Katie Pharoah
    Oh, now this is interesting. That first line draws you in and the chapters chop back and forth which increases the mystery. The only CC I can offer is more description between dialogue to enhance the reader's experience and to drive the plot :)
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